I think your story is great ,the only consejos I could give it to tu is write the story in the way that tu imagine it ,don't hide any small deatil ,and your story is about murder so I think those kind of stories should be mystery and have the thing that the reader will be shocked when we read it ,I only read two chapters and I don't know who's the killer and how would it be publicado and why did he\she kill abigail
