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Can tu guys read my story and tell me if tu like it, what to change and all that stuff, please?

Chapter 1
Boredom

Thantos was sitting on his bed, continuously throwing and catching his blue foam ball, with his headphones in his ears and música playing too loud and combing his medium length black hair out of his bright abnormally coloured eyes.
“This is so pointless. I need something better to do,” he said, scratching his extremely pale skin.
Thantos paused his IPod to hear a scream and girls laughing.
“What the- what was that about?” He asked himself, getting up from his cama and walking to his door.
“I’ll never know if I don’t go check it out,” he smiled.
Thantos walked down his stairs and toward his door and covered his ears as the girls screamed again.
He opened his front door to see a beautiful girl in a solid black bikini and another girl in a purple and rosado, rosa strapless one piece.
“What’s all the screaming about?” Thantos yelled at them, laughing.
The girls screamed, looked at Thantos, then started laughing at there foolishness.
“First tell us who tu are, then we’ll tell tu why we were screaming,” laughed the girl in the one-piece.
“I’ll tell tu who I am after tu tell me who tu are,” Thantos smirked at them.
The two girls looked at each other and smiled.
Both girls held out there left arm, palms flat facing him. Out of nowhere, water came shooting at Thantos, hitting him painfully hard.
“What was that for?” Thantos yelled, clenching his fists, angrily. “And how the hell did tu do that?”
“Because we could. Isn’t that a total ‘duh’ factor?” The girl in the bikini asked.
“And how we did it is none of your damn business.” The other girl scolded.
“Just tell me who tu are,” Thantos said, attempting to breathe calmly and not mostrar his anger, but failing, miserably.
“My name is of no concern right now but… I might be willing to tell tu if tu tell me yours. We’ll tell tu why we were screaming and both of our na
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XxKeithHarkinxX said:
nice! now read mine!


He ran his fingers through her long golden hair while staring into her hazel eyes
“You have beautiful eyes,” he dicho softly, his accent still managed to slip through his softly spoken words.
“Thank you,” Taylor dicho with a smile of pure delight.
“But I really should get going,” She dicho gently pulling Keith’s hand out of her hair.
This was not because she didn’t amor Keith; in fact Taylor loved him with all her heart. It was just everything happened so suddenly. It all started last week in New York City, Keith being a musician had booked a concierto at Red Stallion Pub, and Taylor being a fan of his, bought a ticket for the show. Everything was going normally, Keith Played a few tunes, how it managed to last 3 hours is beyond me. After the mostrar everyone left talking among themselves about the performance. There was only one person that didn’t leave with the crowd, besides the bartenders of course, Taylor stayed to tell Keith that he was an amazing musician and that she had never heard such beautiful noise in her life. Keith was all done packing his guitarra up and about ready to leave when he noticed someone still standing there.
“ And why might tu still be here?” his accent wasn’t as thick she thought it would be,
“I-I just wanted to tell tu something,” Taylor dicho shyly.
“What might that be? Is it that you’re my biggest fan and tu want me to marry you?” Keith dicho with a slight chuckle.
“Oh, nothing like that sir!”
“Please, call me Keith,” he dicho as he carefully put his guitarra case down
“I’m too young to be a sir!” he dicho with a laugh
“So what did tu want to want to tell me?”
“That tu are the most amazing guitarist and singer I’ve ever heard!” She dicho slowly letting go of her shyness.
“Why thank you! I must say it’s a lot nicer to hear that then it is to hear all that sappy, lovie, fan stuff. tu kind of get sick of it after 4 years!”

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i like it but, what's with your obsession with Keith?
Castalinia posted hace más de un año
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.... ARE tu QUESTIONING ME!?
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Shadowmarioking said:
Eh. I don't understand why the girls have to be in bikinis...and the story isn't one that's THAT attention grabbing.
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it will be when there's más up. it get's a lot más interesting as it goes on.
Castalinia posted hace más de un año
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thanks for your opinion though. it is much appreaciated. i will try to improve it.
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okay. i'll try to do that.
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