hola can tu guys help me out???

I have the first chapter of a new possible story but I want to see if anybody is going to read it...
And I was wondering can tu guys read it and tell me what tu think in a comentario o email?
And I don't no the name yet so can tu guys help out with that to? Its not very long o hard to read.Oh and I can give tu a link to it.

And there my other story mysterious amor on the spot lilred96's articles.