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hola do tu like this poem i did about alice and jasper's love?

these two were insepreable
the trust and amor in his eyes
made her feel seguro
when she smiled
it brightened his día
the thrill of the adventure
the adventure of amor
was making alice and jasper
fall ever so passionetly inlove
amor is like the wind
tu cant see it
but tu can feel it
amor folowed jasper and alice
because they were destined for eachother

twilight_lover9 posted hace más de un año

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TEAM-EDWARDxxx said:

I Like it...

But is okay i guess.. maybe sum más stuff bout like vampiros haha that would be interesting..

posted hace más de un año

tu could just go to the request a peom pregunta and say that u kno! but thanx! for the tip

twilight_lover9 posted hace más de un año

Little_Cullen said:

amor it. Punctuation a bit funny, but the actual escritura is really cool. I especially like the bit about he makes her feel seguro and her smile brightens his day. I amor it. Keep it up!

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thank-u so much

twilight_lover9 posted hace más de un año

twilightgirlNo1 said:

i think its great but some of the lines could be a little better.

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twilight0girl said:

it's a perfect poem about them.

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Twilightpup said:

Its really good , tu should make one about Bella and Edward

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emilyemmett said:

That is really good!! tu should write another one!! Maybe about the meadow o Jacob and Renesmee o something!

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sessa123 said:

Its not bad, i always thought a poem used to jus have to rhyme but narr its really gud maybe fix up some little thing and maybe have a good thing to rhyme bout, like werewolves, vampiros anything lol KEEP IT UP HUN XX

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