For those that don’t know, “In Another World: Mob Suez” is an else-world non-cannon story that takes people’s characters and puts them into the real world. The main character of this story is Dave Hyatt, who a side-character in the regular stories I usually make. People’s origins are tweaked, and people live in a semi-civilian-based life.
I had plans for how this story would go through various phases, but I feel the most appropriate course of action would be to cancelar the story.
There are a few reasons I think it’s best to simply end it. While I’ve enjoyed the world-building and creativity this brought around, the más I look at this story, the más it sounds like some cliché teenage anime plot, and tu all know how I feel about anime.
The point of the story was that the members of the club would affect the story; its progression, its characters, everything. People could send in a perfil of their character, what role they wanted their character to be a part of, and what they wanted to have happen with that character.
To say the least, many of these characters were girls. I would blame everyone except me for this, but that’s not the case. I had no less than three female characters of my own that were potential love-interests for Dave, and two that were actively pursued. I will note that I planned to have one leave for a while, and one rejects him early in the story, but there were still two other potential amor interests aside from that, one that was owned por me, and one owned por Rawrmonster123, who has left the community.
It wasn’t just that there were too many love-interests, but that the majority of characters were girls. I would not be able to balance this.
This wasn’t the only issue as I found trying to please everyone’s initial requests (including love-lives) difficult. There were sin respuesta plot-threads that were not going to go anywhere. It wasn’t a mess quite yet but it would become one. One particular plot-hole that bothered me was that an earthquake goes off and the police never appear about it. This was pretty stupid.
I quite enjoyed MANY things about this story, and I had a surprise about Rin and Ira (Virus) that was going to be revealed, but I simply don’t think the story can stand long enough for that.
Not to mention there is literally NO interaction from people when it comes to how the story will play out, and we all know why that is.
Those who were lectura it have vanish save a very tiny amount. I simply don’t think this story is worth continuing, at least not right now. MAYBE in the future I’ll go back and fix it all but not right now.
Sorry to let down whoever might read this but them’s the breaks.
God Bless,
Eat Pie and Prosper
I had plans for how this story would go through various phases, but I feel the most appropriate course of action would be to cancelar the story.
There are a few reasons I think it’s best to simply end it. While I’ve enjoyed the world-building and creativity this brought around, the más I look at this story, the más it sounds like some cliché teenage anime plot, and tu all know how I feel about anime.
The point of the story was that the members of the club would affect the story; its progression, its characters, everything. People could send in a perfil of their character, what role they wanted their character to be a part of, and what they wanted to have happen with that character.
To say the least, many of these characters were girls. I would blame everyone except me for this, but that’s not the case. I had no less than three female characters of my own that were potential love-interests for Dave, and two that were actively pursued. I will note that I planned to have one leave for a while, and one rejects him early in the story, but there were still two other potential amor interests aside from that, one that was owned por me, and one owned por Rawrmonster123, who has left the community.
It wasn’t just that there were too many love-interests, but that the majority of characters were girls. I would not be able to balance this.
This wasn’t the only issue as I found trying to please everyone’s initial requests (including love-lives) difficult. There were sin respuesta plot-threads that were not going to go anywhere. It wasn’t a mess quite yet but it would become one. One particular plot-hole that bothered me was that an earthquake goes off and the police never appear about it. This was pretty stupid.
I quite enjoyed MANY things about this story, and I had a surprise about Rin and Ira (Virus) that was going to be revealed, but I simply don’t think the story can stand long enough for that.
Not to mention there is literally NO interaction from people when it comes to how the story will play out, and we all know why that is.
Those who were lectura it have vanish save a very tiny amount. I simply don’t think this story is worth continuing, at least not right now. MAYBE in the future I’ll go back and fix it all but not right now.
Sorry to let down whoever might read this but them’s the breaks.
God Bless,
Eat Pie and Prosper
Name: Tyler Andrew oro
Nickname: halcón the Vamphog
Attire: Black, blue, and red sneakers
pelaje, piel Color: oro and brown
Eye Color: Green
Bio: When halcón was young, he was turned into a vamphog. The reason he became a vamphog was his father came inicial from work with some sort of chemical. When his father wasn't looking, he took it, and accidentally broke the bottle it was in. The chemical got all over his fur. Once his parents realized, it was too late. It got into his blood stream and made him a vamphog.
Nickname: halcón the Vamphog
Attire: Black, blue, and red sneakers
pelaje, piel Color: oro and brown
Eye Color: Green
Bio: When halcón was young, he was turned into a vamphog. The reason he became a vamphog was his father came inicial from work with some sort of chemical. When his father wasn't looking, he took it, and accidentally broke the bottle it was in. The chemical got all over his fur. Once his parents realized, it was too late. It got into his blood stream and made him a vamphog.
I've never been used to death...
Tension in the workplace, a jealous ex-boyfriend...
All I have to do is to piece together the evidence and finally close the case file...
But what's bothering me?
I know I'm missing something! There's something else here!
There's a strange fluid in her lungs...I don't buy the claim that she died in the tub.
The stage was set...
...the poor girl was murdered...
[AUTHOR NOTE: Hello everyone! I am going to be escritura a new story and I would like to know if I should continue o abort the idea. So please critique and tell me what tu think. I appreciate it. :) ~Juli]
Tension in the workplace, a jealous ex-boyfriend...
All I have to do is to piece together the evidence and finally close the case file...
But what's bothering me?
I know I'm missing something! There's something else here!
There's a strange fluid in her lungs...I don't buy the claim that she died in the tub.
The stage was set...
...the poor girl was murdered...
[AUTHOR NOTE: Hello everyone! I am going to be escritura a new story and I would like to know if I should continue o abort the idea. So please critique and tell me what tu think. I appreciate it. :) ~Juli]
G-Sil was chokeing Silhouette, holding her above a pond. Shock, V2, Claws, Prime, and Rico stood about 5 feet from them. One step closer, and G-Sil could've dropped Silhouette into the pond. Silhouette was bleeding oil, which made it look más disgusting than blood. Her oxygen supply was running low, and she could barely move. Her ears were releasing smoke. And her eyes looked red and tired. It was like her own personal hell. The sky was red and cloudy. The sounds of sirens filled the air. But I'm starting at the ending, let's start at the beginning, shall we.........?
Stay tuned for part 2!!!!!!!
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Stay tuned for part 2!!!!!!!
(FC's belong to original owners!)
Midnight:It's my birthday!Im finally 10!
Platinum:Can I come in?
Midnight:Sure!Come on in Platinum!
Platinum:Happy Birthday!
Midnight:Thanks!
Platinum:For your present It's something I couldnt wrap...
Midnight:Thats okay what is it?
Platinum:I found out the location of a Chaos Emerald!
Midnight:OMG!
Platinum:For your birthday,we are going to get the Chaos esmeralda together!
Midnight:Awesome!Thank You!
Platinum:Im your bff.It's my job.
(Downstairs)
Midnight:Mom,Dad?
Midnight's Mom:What is it?
Midnight:Platinum is going to take me to get a Chaos Emerald!Can I go?
Midnight's Mom:I dont know?What do tu think hun?
Midnight's Dad:She can go I trust Platinum.
Midnight and Platinum:YAY!
Then Platinum and Midnight had set out on their adventure for the Chaos Emerald.
The End I HOPE tu LIKED IT!
PLEASE READ PART 2!