Alice Cullen in Breaking Dawn part 1

Hello Dear Reader,
I am escritura an original novel and I wanted people to at least hear the word of it before I tried to get it out in the world. It's called "The Death Contracts, Vol. 1: GLIMPSE" and it's the story of the main character named Astrid Marker.
The reason why I'm posting this link everywhere I know possible is because I want fans. Desperate? No. más like curious to see how many people can review what I have so far and tell me what they think. I have the first 8 Chapters publicado on my perfil at the website figment.com, the link to it plus the synopsis is straight below, but I wanted...

Chapter 6
Sleeping was hard when tu had gear stick poking tu in the culo all night. After being with Jacob for the segundo time in twenty four hours, we were too tired to make ourselves back up into my cama to get some sleep after so we just slept in the car. I’ve never done that before, it’s not like me.
I knew Charlie, o maybe the whole town would have something to say about that, if they saw us sneak out of the car half naked sneaking our back into the house late at night. So we played our cards seguro and stayed in the car.
Jacob’s peaceful sleeping body leaned against the window, from...

Chapter 5
"Hey Bella, well I was hoping, tu know I wouldn't ask tu unless you’re were the last resort cause I hate to be a pain, but do tu mind driving me home? I just got a text from Alice, she went inicial like an hora ago, the school nurses sent her home, her headache was getting worse.
Edward asked on our way out the front doors.
Everyone was rushing like a tornado out the front door all at once, everyone was excited for the weekend. Which made me wonder, it’s not like they have something super exciting happening, nothing is really exciting here.
Edward's pregunta startled me, but I didn’t...

Chapter 4
My night with Jacob was fantastic. Better then fantastic. I couldn’t had imagined losing my virginity any better, and with a better person.
However I would be lying through my teeth if I didn’t say I was still sore. It’s not like everyone talks about, o seen on TV. But now that I’ve experienced it, I fully understand why couples keep their sex life private. Last night was just Jacob and I, no one else, our amor shown in physical form. When I was ten my mother spilled the bird and the bee's talk. I wasn’t really fused on the whole concept, merely due to the fact that I was...