escritura Article: corazón of the soilder

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posted by delta117

i awoke pain everywhere it felt like my skin was melting but yet i did not scream traing kicked in and i found my black armoar to any normal sentient bieng it would be like an anchor but i am not normal am i after that i grabbed my weapons the first was a set of 2 curved assian knifes curved and made for my hands segundo standard ar rifle it had no scope only sights all i needed to kill at 100 yards third a shotgun normal used in swat teams tactical 12 guage shot gun bomba action forth 44mm glock i holousterd it and my knifes my knifes at arm length pistol on my hip then an explosion rocked my cell and soilders poured in i dispathed them with my a.r 5 dead hundreds to go i stepped outr my cell through the hole my enemy s made my radio head set in my casco crackled to life " mac come in mack this is alpha team we are in poisition" i paused looked for any más targets and replied " copy that alpha team this is mac i am on my way any word frombeta o omega?" " beta's in poistion no word from alpha but stats says they're alive alpha team out" good know i could get my three teams out of this base and get back to the HQ. down a carfully polished corridor i searched for the enemy no sighn it was eerily quiet the only noises were the sound of my boots hitting thewaxed floor and my silent controled breathing that was bad.after three floors up i found some action i had switched to my shotgun for close combat. two teams of well trained soilders 2 sets of pistolas aimed at my head 2 easy. each team consitsted of five soilders so there wetre tenguns pointed at me i had a small windo w of 3 minutos to kill them o they would have help so i targetetd the first team i shot two of them dead an injured one there i shot the injurd one and got knocked on my back por a smg i lifted my pistol up as i fell and shot my shooter in his face he crumpled to the ground then the other was stuned a how i had killed his theam in four segundos i keep time on this stuff then i knocked him in the neck with the handel of my gun and he fell to the groungd he had a broken thacea and larenix instant death i reholstered my pistol and and picked up an anti-personal fragmentatin grenade from a dead soilderpulled the pin and threw it at team 2 it landed in the center and blosumed into a firey flor of shrapnel i pulled my pisol back out and checked the bodies one injure d1 shot in the head changed that all others dead in 7 segundos i was good

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Cullen-fan That was really good do you write alot?

harold This was a little hard to read at first, since there was hardly any punctuation at all, but by the end I was getting into it more. You might play with verb tense a bit more if you are going for the stream-of-consciousness writing; present tense and 1st person perspective work well together, particularly if you intend to spell words phonetically because the character wouldn't know any better. A good example of this (in my opinion) is the novel [u]Feersum Endjin[/u] - large parts are written in first person, present tense, from the perspective of a warrior who spells everything phonetically. I think moving into present tense would make the other stuff seem more intentional. I'm interested to see more, and particularly curious about the cause of the pain he feels in the beginning. I also like the humorous bits, like the aside "i keep time on this stuff" in the middle of the fight. Some suggestions: proofread after taking a break from writing the piece, so that you can view it with fresh eyes. The spelling may be intentional, and it works, but the words blending together "soilderpulled", "tenguns", "thewaxed" don't work as well for me. Also, you should check which team is talking to which team: "no word from alpha but stats says they're alive alpha team out" Whether or not you decide to switch it to present tense, it's got a lot of energy and it flows quickly. I'm interested to see where you go with it.

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For you, angel.

posted by blossomyumyum

Dear Noel,
I wish tu were still here. At times I go back to when we were little- we loved to eat Push Pop Ice Cream and played in the pool every día at summer. tu were my best friend….. But we were like sisters, playing house with my little brother. Your grandmother got along with my grandmother, too- they talked to each other, and life seemed to be so easy. But then we parted por moving away. I still thought of tu every day, and every night I worried that something would happen to you. But now, you’ve left us all, and gone on to a place only tu and your sister know about, along with...

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The New Age (prologue)

posted by graystone

I don't remember how long I've been running on the open grounds. It does seem long enough. But I was determined,devoted. Up above me,I noticed the jet planes streaking through the blue-black sky. I did not care. I did,but I'm not going to pay any más attention to it than the sinking feeling of hopelessness that wrapped my mind. The grounds were filled with rocks and sharp stones. Any other day,I would have bothered to watch my way trying not to fall onto the sharp stones which threatened to tear my skin,but not today. No,not today...
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The Protectors Ch. 1

posted by problematic124

****Please don't copy, Enjoy!****
Chapter 1
The new girl
The first thought that came to Phire's mind of the new inicial she was ment to live in for the siguiente four years was how strange. Her new hometown looked like something from a movie o a magazine.
If Phire hadn't known that she was in Open fields she probably would have mistaken this for L.A. o even Hollywood.
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How to stay dedicated to escritura a story, FF, etc.

posted by Pixalfirebolt

Steps for success
#1 ~ Find a subject
Find a subject that tu like. Such as fantasy, historical fiction, sci-fi, o any other genre tu like.
#2 ~ Find a topic
Think of an idea that tu would like for your story. Make sure that it can fit into the category that you've picked previously.
#3 ~ Think of a topic sentence
If tu don't have a juicy topic sentence, readers will generally lose interest.
#4 ~ Plan ahead
It's always a good idea to plan ahead. Make sure that your story doesn't lead to a dead end, become boring over time, and make sure that tu have enough time in your daily life to type this...

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Save me (Re-write for spelling, grammar, etc.)

posted by Pixalfirebolt

Max's POV
I ran into my room crying. My head and my corazón ached. I thought it was clear I loved Fang, but I guess he didn't know. I saw him besar a blonde haired tramp at school today. I fell on my cama and burried my face in a pillow. I cried.

10 minutos later

I heard my door open, but I didn't dare to look. I knew who it was and I didn't want to talk to him. Fang sat down siguiente to me and stroked my back.
"Max what's wrong?" He said, worriedly. I just shook my head.
"What's wrong?" I took my head out from under the almohada and stared daggers at him. I didn't care my mascara was running o that...

20 things guys should know about girls (will update as I think of more)

posted by angeladdie270

1) Girls (at the age of 15 o so) think about sex just as much as guys do... The only catch is some of us think about it for the emotional parts, and some of us like it for the physical parts. You'd be surprised who is in which group.

2)If tu like us, tell us. Do not be worried about what we'll think, because we are flattered no matter if we like tu o not.

3) Most of the time girls are 99% sure when a guy likes us. The only way to be 100% sure is if tu tell us.

4) For some strange reason I've always found myself to become attracted to guys that like me. (Unless they're super creepy and stalk...

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Surviving (a poem)

posted by problematic124

Her eyes were raw
But she could not cry
It was all she saw
The pain and the lies
Her hope was broken
She felt incomplete
Freedom was wanted she wanted to be
To be able to laugh
To be able to smile
If not even once
But once in a while
She has to survive
She has to survive
It's the only thing that could keep her alive
Her eyes started to water
But she held the tears back
She never wanted
To be seen like that
Her life was of ruins
She hurt a real lot
Her family was gone
And left to rot
It was a long time
And yet it still hurt
She felt like a crime
And even worse
But she needed to survive
They would want it that way
So...

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Remembering Lisa

posted by dawnisbeauty

She sat there,at the foot of the bed,holding the book in her trembling hands.Rain fell,slamming against the window.The room was cold,dark,gloomy despite the bright blue of the walls.Somehow,blue didnt seem so bright anymore..not without her wide dimpled smile to liven it up.Lisa...the name filled her mind,sending little pinpricks of raw pain throughout her body.Lisa,bright thrteen año old Lisa,her only little sister was gone.Tears spilled from Jane's eyes.She looked out the window.Max was standing in the porch,his handsome face tight with concern.Somewhwere in her mind,she,Jane knew it was...

A Strange Meeting Part 1

posted by princess_mimi

hola guys...I'm very much nervous... This is my very first writing.. I've never write anything in my whole life except for school essays ....I will update it in 3 parts... please if u like it leave a comment... criticism is also well-comed

Darjeeling,India. Darjeeling is definitely one of the most beautiful places on the earth. Every single thing of Darjeeling is beautiful. Its dicho that Great dangerous are always lurking behind every beautiful thing, same is here. Every single thing have its own story here. Some of them will make tu happy and the others will make tu sad o it will make you...

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Save Me Ch. 8

posted by para-scence

"Alessa! What happened?!" Micah shouted. I had a long, somewhat deep scar around my face. Last night Dad pushed me down the stairs, and the railing had scratched my face. But I just shook my head.

"Nothing. I just fell," I said. He sighed and shook his head.

"Would tu please be más careful? Do tu know what it'd do to me if anything happened to you?" I frowned.

"I'm sorry," I dicho quietly. He rolled his eyes and hugged me.

"C'mon. We're late for school."

***

After school, I told Micah I wanted to go to the park o something; just to have fun. I didn't tell him I was still afraid to go home. He...

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My life Story

posted by StarWarsFan7

Author's Note: "Look, now I am going to tell tu a story of the life of Rosemary Vega a.k.a me."

I am 11 years old.
My birthday is on March 25.
I am very talented at escritura stories, canto like famous people (example: Shakira, Selena Gomez, Demi Lovato and Lady Gaga) I amor to act!
When I grow up I want to be singer o a voice actress.
I am interested in estrella Wars, Pokemon, Everybody Hates Chris and George Lopez.
My favorito! pokemon are: Jirachi, Roserade, Mismagious and Meganium.
I was born in Wilson, North Carolina.

Thank tu for giving me your time to read this article! :D

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That Wasn't Your Fight[Ch.6]

posted by HarryPLover

"Overall, I can say that I do amor him.."<3

"Overall, I can say that I do love him.."<3

I was still in his tight embrace. I never noticed how warm he was. Well maybe because I have never really hugged him like this before. I was just happy to have him back.
"Mmmmm. I missed you." I heard him whisper in my ear.
"Mmmm...No I'm pretty sure I missed you." I manged to whisper back. It felt a little weird saying that too him. I didn't want to be all rude and not say it back, but I just.. I still haven't decided whether I actually wanna go through with this o not.
Granted, I did say that I do amor him like amor him, amor him, but at the same time I amor him as my best friend and right...

Making Memories: Chapter 4

posted by dancing_banana

Peter
I can’t believe she opened up like that. I can’t believe we’re this close now. We talk every día now. I keep trying to tell her to get away from her inicial life. She just keeps refusing. I don’t know what to do, in all those classes in school they where always like reportar it, reportar it, and reportar it. So what should I do?

Kristen
Peter keeps saying to get away. I should. If someone else knew they’d call social services without hesitation. I am completely engrossed in the book I’m lectura when Jim walks in with a very cocky smile....

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An Unforgetable Place-Part 3

posted by rAsberrStrarS

He took my face in his hands, so normally-as if it were a natural instinct to be doing something like this with me.
My breath caught in my throat,as we inclined our heads towards each other in perfect unison.
His lips were warm and soft and sweet,all at the same time,the sensation blinded me.That he was besar me,not other better girls who'd had más experience.My corazón was beating like a birds wings fluttering together in my chest.
Taylor pressed his forehead against mine ans sighed,his breath warmed my face.
We pulled back form each other but still twined our fingers together like we were never...

My story

posted by 4evercherylcole

It was a cold, breezy Autumn evening while Anna Brown, a reasonably fair girl, was watching EastEnders. She loved this programme and never missed it.

Anna, like I said, was a reasonably fair girl. Her kindness and helpfulness would sometimes flatter people. When she was a little girl, people used to 'oooh' and 'aaah' at her cuteness.

Soon Anna's Mother put her to bed. Her Mother told her to go to cama early that night for her Mother had a surprise in-store for her the siguiente morning. It was for Anna's 9th birthday and she was extremely excited.

During...

Kat: a pet like no other 1

posted by woowie

Isabella and I were driving through the darkness of Florida. We had gotten married a año earlier, and decided it was time we got a pet. Finally, we came to the adress we were looking for.

At the door, there was a woman, and siguiente to her was a large, purple, alien. "I'm Charlotte, and this is Penelope, the proud mother." dicho the woman. Penelope happily greeted us. "Where's the dad?" I asked.

"Oh, Zapnis? I honestly don't know where he ran off to this time. I suppose tu want to see the babies?" she led us into a room. One ran forward, and crashed into my legs. She was light pink. "Boys are...

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Serenity- Chapter 1

posted by jasperwhlover

Serenity

Chapter 1

Once upon a time in heaven there lived an ángel who was yet a child, she was loved por all the ángeles and most importantly God who named her Serenity, and gave her power that controlled serenity, peace and all things calm and gentle, but he secretly gave her the Elixir of Life which would drip from her finger each día and each night, unknown was this to the other ángeles because God was sure that if this was known Serenity would be in grave peril because, man alone does not seek eternal life, angels, devils and all creatures whether they reside in heaven o hell seek the Elixir...

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Spirit of stne part 6

posted by TDIlover226

~It seems like these people that I use to call enemies, that I use to think were trying to kill me, are now my best friends. Annie, Ann, Vincent, and JJ are actually alot nicer than they seemed in the beginning. They save lives, and I help, they're known as the spirits, and I'm one of them now! They go to my school when they are in their human forms, and they really are the best friends that I could ever had, they all have there transfos, and I just can't live without them now! I can tell them anything! JJ has mastered free style fighting, and has become the leader of the spirits, and Annie...

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Spirit Of Stone part 5

posted by TDIlover226

Eddie just sat there in the plain dark room, looking at the many tubes coming from the floor to the ceiling. He wondered how far away he was from home, he wondered what his parents thought, and if they'd already called the police, trying to look got him. He estimated that it had been about 3 day's sence he'd been taken. Now he could tell that it was getting dark, he wasn't sure how though, the room was dark, had no windows and was cold and damp. He thought that he might starve down there, sence the mutants hadn't been down there for some time now. He really thought that they were just messing...