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Do tu like this?

its a poem i made about school (its just a joke thats not how i feel about school):

school is not cool
it's just cruel,
teachers want tu to do maths
because its one of their wrath,
they'll make tu in detention
and when tu ask they just won't mention,
they'll give tu tests
so tu do your best,
(but really they just do it to torture us)

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lol i liked it do u write little poems like these a lot?
ryofangirl posted hace más de un año
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ya i do and thank tu
StarGirl1721 posted hace más de un año
 StarGirl1721 posted hace más de un año
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Bananaaddict said:
I think it's funny! But here are some suggestions:
1. tu should capitalize the first letter in each line, unless you're trying to mimic e. e. cummings.
2. I don't know if 'wrath' can be used in that context o as a plural noun.
3. tu can't 'make' someone in detention. How about put?
4. The last line doesn't rhym, with doesn't really matter since it could be free verse, but the rest of the poem does rhym, so it's sort of messing with a pattern tu already laid out for yourself.
Of course, tu don't have to do any of that. They're just suggestions.
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posted hace más de un año 
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thanks i will try to do it siguiente time
StarGirl1721 posted hace más de un año
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hahah i dicho detentions cause i have heard of some teachers they just make u in detention and when tu ask they won't answer and change the subject so thats why i publicado that
StarGirl1721 posted hace más de un año
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No detention is fine, it's just that someone "make" tu in detention makes no sense. It would be better if it was "put" tu in detention.
Bananaaddict posted hace más de un año
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