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which poems out of these two i wrote do tu like best and why??(prop included)

"THE PROMISE"

As I noticed myself becoming old and gray,

I knew it was time to visit the little girl of yesterday.

She had been kept safely hidden

In a place where others had been forbidden.

She knew I had to leave her long ago,

So one of us could find the strength to grow.

I promised her that I would someday return,

For she was my main concern.

No one could understand how her and I connect,

For I was the one present during the crime and neglect.

As I opened the door to yesterday,

I heard the sound of children happily at play,

But I noticed her sitting all alone and sad

Until our eyes met and she became glad.

We reunited por hugging and besar one another

Like a beloved daughter and a mother.

I comforted her and dried away her tears

That were too painful for so many years.

As I looked in her small eyes of grey,

I told her that the monster had gone away.

She looked up at me and said,"I amor you"

Then I replied, "I amor tu too".

Someone who cared had finally set her free.

The little girl that I used to be.

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lost Innocence



Looking back on a time and place

Seeing a child's innocent face

Knowing that things aren't as they appear

For inside she cries silent tears

Deep inside she is filled with pain

She feels dirty and full of shame

Innocence lost at a very young age

Locked this child in a pain filled cage

There is no freedom o escape

From the fact this child was raped

While the guilty man is roaming free

This child is sentenced to eternity

Eternity locked away with all this shame

She can't help but feel that she was to blame

Even though common sense says it was not her fault

She can't seem to help from having these thoughts

What ifs' keep running through her mind

She keeps going back to those moments in time

If there isn't something different she could have done

Why didn't she scream o at least try to run

Fear kept her froze
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dang heresmore toteh poem.lol. illpost it in an articulo
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TDIlover4ever said:
I like both poems, but I like the first poem better.

I like that one because it's very good, creative, and sweet. And alot of other reasons that I can't fit in one answer. ♥
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thanks:)
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zanesaaomgfan said:
The Promise. I like that one.
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volleyblue13 said:
Wow. Both are AMAZING... but I'm going to have to say.. "Lost Innocence" just because it has much más strong emotion behind it. Though I amor the ending of "The Promise", as well.
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i didnt add the rest othe poem ither .oops
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LocoTransPiXp7 said:
I amor poems! I 'am poetically sound and I know what it takes to put together a great poem! I would definitely say lost innocence since it seems to be a little más informative. The flow of #2 is better than the flow of #1!
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